Writing







Descriptive Language Features
 * Action verbs: Action verbs provide interest to the writing and lift it from the mundane. Avoid over use of verbs such as come, go, went, get, said, look, shouted, laughed etc. For example instead of //The old woman was in his way//...try... The old woman barred his path.
 * Specific nouns : Strong nouns have more specific meanings, eg. oak as opposed to tree. These specific nouns give more information.
 * Activate nouns : Make nouns actually do something, eg. //It was raining// could become Rain splashed down.
 * Adjectives and adverbs : There is no doubt that writing needs adjectives and adverbs to bring it alive, qualify the action and provide description and information for the reader. However, it is important that writing is not cluttered with too many adjectives or adverbs or the narrative will be overwhelmed and the effect lost. Remember quality over quantity.
 * Use the senses: Where appropriate, the senses can be used to describe and develop the experiences, setting and character.
 * What does it smell like?
 * What can be heard?
 * = What can be seen? =
 * What does it taste like?
 * What does it feel like?
 * Imagery and figures of speech : Figures of speech and imagery are writing devices where words are used to create pictures in the reader's mind. These are not taken at face value, they are interpreted - therefore we say they are figurative not literal. Though again remember excessive use will detract from the impact of the writing.
 * You will remember these from the beginning of the year...
 * Simile: A direct comparison using like or as... The wind wrapped me up like a cloak
 * Metaphor : An indirect or hidden comparison... She has a heart of stone.
 * Onomatopoeia: A suggestion of sound through words... splat, boom
 * Alliteration : the repetition of the first letter of words in a line... Crazy Charlie crunched chocolate crackles.
 * Personification : Giving nonliving things living characteristics... The steel beam clenched its muscles.



====As we make our way down the Naki, we catch a glimpse of the near by sea. We can smell the fresh pine blowing in the soft breeze as we finally reach the beach side. The summer sand sings silently as we stroll down the shoreline. We can see the distant ocean upon the horizon. The radiant orange surreal sunset drifting upon the ocean floor. We slip into our wet suits, as we prepare for the final surf. We get our surf boards out of the woodie and dive into the wild surf. A midnight blue arising upon the night sky. As the sun dies down we catch our final wave back to the sandy shoreline and make our way back home...====

By Locky, Lachlan & Connery.



The Sunset

I stroll along the soft sandy beach and gaze at the bright, golden tangerine sun. I set myself down to watch the beautiful sunset. The blue water reflects off the bright sun. The sun slowly drifts down below the ocean till it comes out in the morning. I wait till the tip of the sun is no longer giving light to this land. As it gets darker I slowly walk back to my camp. Once I get into the bed I fall asleep wondering about the things mother nature has given to us.

By Alia, Holly, Heather, Melanie

Melting Moment

As I sat on the rock hard wooden seat, I looked at the dissolving sun melting into the ocean. I inhaled the salty sea air, as the palm trees danced to the crashing waves on the shore, as chills hot up my spine. I was blinded by the tangerine orange sun that shone down on me. I stood up and looked down at the sand seeping in between my toes as my vision returned. I strolled towards the water. The water was like being in a melting freezer.

By Amy K, Chloe, Hannah and Shontelle

The Sunset

As we stepped out of the car our bare feet touched the scorching hot black sand. As we hopped from one foot to another we dashed towards the surging surf. As we ride the waves towards the shore; the sizzling sausages smell wafts down, dragging us out of the surf.

The sun was blazing yellow with a strip of orange going through violet pink water. The reflection of the clouds that landed on the water, had confused my eyes. The sun contrasted with the violet pink sky and moved down like a blazing yellow Ferrari.

The sunset was surreal it stretched it arms into every corner possible, warming the world; as I sat there on the wharf with my feet in the water. I watched the people enjoying the moment.

As my head hit the pillow, I drifted away in a long lasting sleep, waiting for the next day to come.

By Cynthia, Jared, Amelie, Zac P, Christina & Dwayne.

The Silly Lama

The peach coloured sunset sparkled gracefully like a diamond crystal. Never before has a beautiful sight been seen by a gold lama. While munching grass he stared at the shinning sunset, thinking... "While I think to myself, what a wonderful world". As the sunset fades away leaving darkness to the world the lama walks away.

By Amy C, Kaitlin, Ryan & Tommy

The Sunset

Bob was sitting down on the beach watching the sun as it set behind the mountains. He smelt the salty water and the fresh air. The sun beamed bright, orange and yellow into the sky.

Pipi and mussels cling to the rocks and hide in the sand; Fish swim through the beautiful marine life. Deadly sea monsters swim like shadows in the water hiding in caves on the sea bed.

As Bob walks along the beach watching the sun set, slowly creeping down the sky waiting till morning to rise again.

By Baljeet, Sam, Teaabo, Josh, Hayden & Damian

The Sunset

I walk into the forest filled with dark magnificent colours, I look up and see glimpses of glowing colours through the canopy of leaves like fire. I feel the coldness of the wind running across my face, it gives me the feeling of home. I see the sun starting to set, tangerine colour blending in with velvety pink. I feel the warm glow of the sun like a mothers hug, counting down as the shrinking sun sets. I fall into darkness waiting for the sun to rise and set again.

Caitlin, Eseta & Skye